It was totally unbeta'ed. I wanted to get it out there and off my plate, other wise it might not have seen the light of day for another week or so-ish? - I definitely understand the feeling there.
As for the corrections, it's pretty minor stuff, really:
Darker moments threaded its way should be Darker moments threaded their way, Elevated his status, help craft should be Elevated his status, helped craft, One can never really love a tool, can they, as there is no reason for it. should end with a question mark, and it is unclear what the word 'that' in this sentence refers to: of a world where my apparent light outshines the sun and that does not know darkness.. (I think it refers to a world that does not know darkness, but I think the sentence could be rearranged a bit to make that clearer immediately).
But yes, your Ovelia is definitely IC here - and I actually forgot to mention this before, but I really loved the detail with Delita and the blade of grass whistle. It hearkens back to a more innocent side of him in a wonderfully bittersweet fashion.
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As for the corrections, it's pretty minor stuff, really:
Darker moments threaded its way should be Darker moments threaded their way, Elevated his status, help craft should be Elevated his status, helped craft, One can never really love a tool, can they, as there is no reason for it. should end with a question mark, and it is unclear what the word 'that' in this sentence refers to: of a world where my apparent light outshines the sun and that does not know darkness.. (I think it refers to a world that does not know darkness, but I think the sentence could be rearranged a bit to make that clearer immediately).
But yes, your Ovelia is definitely IC here - and I actually forgot to mention this before, but I really loved the detail with Delita and the blade of grass whistle. It hearkens back to a more innocent side of him in a wonderfully bittersweet fashion.